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Child obesity Introduction New Zealand has seen a epidemic rise with the child obesity - why hasn't anybody tried to stop it and who is to blame? Obesity is a abnormal increase of body fat. Usually 20% or more over an individuals ideal body weight. Obesity is linked with a high risk ill health,disabilities and some times death. Paragraph 1 If __there__ parents carry __to__ much weight, the children are more likely to be over weight too. __three__ things that can cause obesity are genes,or the family's pattern of eating and exercise. For the first 4 years of your life being over weight means you have a __Betta__ chance of being obese when you are older. Sometimes not going to bed early enough can increase your chance of coming obese. Paragraph 2 Did you know healthy food is more expensive than junk food. For family's that have low income it is cheaper to by junk food. Overweight children get bullied at school and get highly depressed and they get left out of games. Paragraph 3 Children need a healthy diet such as fruit witch you should have 2 to 4 severing s a day. Vegetables witch you should have 3 to 5 severing s a day and the rice and the bread category 6 to 11 servings a day. Look at the diagram to get the rest of the information.Children should do at least 1 hour a day of fitness and adults half an hour a day.

Conclusion People need to start realizing that this problem is going world wide and we need to act very soon.

//Miss Crawford : A great start, Molly. You have used factual language and referred to statistics well.// //You have a few spelling errors that need to be fixed. Paragraph 2 is too short. How else could you describe the solutions // Introduction New Zealand has seen a epidemic rise with the child obesity, why hasn't anybody tried to stop it and who is to blame?Obesity is a abnormal increase of body fat. Usually 20% or more over an individuals ideal body weight. Obesity is linked with a high risk ill health,disabilities and some times death. Paragraph 1 If their parents carry to much weight,the children are more likely to be over weight too Three things that can cause obesity is genes,or the family's pattern of eating and exercise .For the first 4 years of your life being over weight means you have a Better chance of being obese when you are older. Sometimes not going to bed early enough can increase your chance of coming obese. Paragraph 2 Did you know healthy food is more expensive than junk food. For a salad it costs about 10 dollars and for a family pie its about 6 dollars so For family's that have low income it is cheaper to by junk food. Overweight children get bullied and get pushed around at school and get highly depressed and they get left out of games.but there are ways to prevent this from happning like Paragraph 3 Children need a healthy diet such as fruit witch you should have 2 to 4 severing s a day. Vegetables witch you should have 3 to 5 severing s a day and the rice and the bread catogory 6 to 11 servings a day. Look at the diagram to get the rest of the information. According to s.p.a.r.c children should do at least 1 hour a day of fitness unnfortanly most don’t and adults half an hour a day. Conclusion People need to start realizing that this problem is going world wide and we need to  act very soon. By Molly Densem